and if anyone has any ideas on what the Dom Kavish should look like, plz Email me at [email protected] , just dont post it on the fourm, i want this to be a surprise. and if you have a broadband connection like i do, then click on this hyperlink

hey killa i admit, kool faction DUDE .... it can be better if called freelancer 3,after neuromancers story ... Keep it up... do anything but dont kill juni kill evry1 i dont care but just dont kill " juni "

And about Dom kavash.. i think it should look huge big vvv big.. and spoooky... and it should look advanced in technology.. and populated... not like in the original freelancer.. dom kavash was hugh... spread all over sirius, spooky lighten.. thats all the hint i can give, u have to do the thinking !!! : D
well if u dont like it just
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well if anyone wants to Email me a drawing or anything about the Dom Kavish, my Email adress is [email protected]. If you like splinter cell then click on this link

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Very good Killa!!

I was NOT criticising or rediculing. I was requesting the courtesy of checking ones spelling. Irregardless of ones native tongue if they are using an english word procesor spelling & grammer can be can be checked automatically. And even with good writing if it is rife with misspellings reading can be quite difficult as it will make following the thread difficult.

I have done a fair amount of editing & writing & therefore KNOW how difficult BOTH can be. Which is why it is always good to have another read your piece prior to making it available. And even then things will be overlooked. I have gone back & read some of mine weeks later & still found a few things that were missed. They were small items which is why they were overlooked. And previous checks had picked up all the major one.

In fact I have noticed that even when people are making posts they use poor grammer & truncated spelling. I have come to accept this becasue I understand the purpose but that still doess not make it correct. The bad thing about this is that it will slowly creep into your daily grammer and writing. Eventually making it difficult to communicate to others which do not know the shorthand lingo. I even have that difficulty reading some posts and. at times, I have little idea what they are saying & at times not able to decifer or infer what they are saying.

So, to reiterate, all I was asking for was a bit of courtesy to the readers.

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eagle, i usually dont have time to do all of that, i just make them up as i go, and put them up when i get a chance. I dont have any kind of spelling or grammar check on my computer. my computer is so screwed up, it wont even play freelancer anymore. its been almost 6 months scince i las played it. So if anyone is going to complain it should be me.

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To make this posteasier to read could you please not take up half the page explaining one thing you did? Im mean, reading a HUGE reply just to explain about spelling.

would everyone just stop complaining and let killa write in peace!before this thread gets closed down

Killa, I like the story.

It might be a good idea to re-post your chapters in a new thread and let people post reactions to your story in this thread.

and why would this thread get closed down?


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because of some self-rightous people thinking they're better than everyone else by criticising other people's spelling and practically saying that ur lazy killa, in saying that u don't bother to check ur spelling which i find offensive personally. I mean i wouldn't like it if i was being accused of being lazy when i'm not


Edited by - Gowserpaul on 7/18/2004 1:56:20 PM

Captured Pt. 10: Meating the Survivors

"Cut your engiens and prepair for termination!" the voice over the radio said. Orillion picked up the microphone and asked the unknown craft for its identifaction. "You are in a restricted area, its you who need to identify your selvs." Again Orillion picked up the microphone. "This is the German sleeper ship Rienland. We need to get back to Sirius to stop a Nomad invasion." There was a gasp on the radio, then the voice said "Your tring to stop the Nomads? Fine, follow me and land on that planet." Everyone was puzzeled, the same ship that was going to kill everyone 15 seconds ago was now giving them an open inventation to land. The Rienland touched down on the frozen surface of the icy planet. A man came walking up to the people slowly making their way out of the Rienland, he said ¿ "Usted es los tring de parar los Nómadas, corrija?" No one could understand him, then he said "Si es hombres que usted necesita, toma tanto como usted quiere. Somos las únicas personas que sobrevivieron el choque de El Signia Hay sólo acerca de seis mil. Pero por favor, toma algo usted necesita, los Nómadas se deben parar." Orillion and Juni put on their language translators. "This is spanish," Orillion turned to the man and said "Repita por favor." The main said " Tome cualquier usted necesita, la raza humana necesita ser libre de los Nómadas." Orillion pulled out his translator and hit the TRANSLATE button. The translator beeped three times and then said "Take whatever you need, the human race needs to be free from the Nomads." Orillion then said "We need some men, a few of your best ships, and alot of guns. We have a plan that might take Sirius back from the Nomads." then he hit the TRANSLATE button again, and the translator said "Necesitamos a algunos hombres, algunos de sus mejores barcos, y de alot de fusiles. Tenemos un plan que quizás tome Sirius espalda de los Nómadas." Trent was compleatly lost, he had never heard of the Spanish language before, and now Juni and Orillion were having a converstation with him. Orillion handed the man a translator and showed him how to use it. He spoke into the translator and hit the button and the translator beeped, then said "We have some very fast ships, we can spair you about one hundred and fifty men. But this is the first I have heard about Sirius being taken over, we are the El Signia survivors, we crashed here about fifty years ago, and havent been able to contact any one but our own clan. Im comming with you, the Nomads distroyed our solar system, and we need to get even with them." "Fine, you can come, but you will have to do exactly what I say." Orillion told the man. As everyone was walking away, the man yelled his name out. "Enrique" Over the radio Trent could hear him ordering people around, and telling them to suit up. He could only understand this because Orillion had given him a translator. As Hundreds of ships launched to the sky, Juni walked over to trent, "Hey, you ready?" she said. "Yeh, I just wish King could be here to help out with this." Orillion yelled for Trent and Juni to hurry up. As they got on the Rienland, and blasted off, in plain site was a jumphole that led right to Sirius. Orillion had the ship run some tests and found out that the jumphole came out right where the Texas jumpgate used to be in the New York system. All of the ships went through, and came out in view of the ruiens of the Texas jumpgate, and on the radar screen, there were about 10 Nomad Battleships heading right for them.

End of Captured Pt. 10
Next episode comming soon

欺騙糞！! if you could read that, then im impresed

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