This has absolutely nothing to do with your upcoming story (which I'm sure will be fantastic) but I had to speak out. I would highly suggest you pay a visit to the CYOF 2 RPG. *gasps* to-- much----- legal -------loophole-------------crap-------------RPG---------------dieing--------------------------------help----------please!

If you don't do something soon this RPG is going to die in a far worse way than the original. Slow strangulation. I know ww2jacob does his best but I think things are getting beyond him. Currently we have wasted at least 5 pages arguing over a loophole in the rules that would allow an enemy fleet to somehow get through an occupied system completely undetected and unscathed.


PLEASE HELP US!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Frankly, VD, you and Triyun are the ones most pushing the argument. I'm just defending myself. I say again, stop crying over spilt milk.

@ DSQrn: My opinion is that its actually going really well in the rpg right now (I've told you this already). Other than, of course, the blistering argument about how I couldn't have moved my forces into Honshu...grr...

GUYS! Chill!
Get you arses out of DSQrn's fanfic thread, and talk to him on MSN or something. The problem has been delt with, so leave his story in peace.

DS, I think that sound like a great idea for a story!

Sorry. I didn't mean to clutter this thread. BTW I'm sure this fanfic will be great. Imagine having three great fan fics in progress at once (Bret,Neuromancer, and now you) *shudders* The suspense will be horrifying.

Actually, I agree. It sounds great.

sorry about the clutter.

sorry bout the delay ladies and gents my PC is dying so i had to nurse it, no worries it will be alive soon. i am rather busy latley so i will try to get the story up, once again sorry. oh and about the RPG 2.1 is coming out soon

here is the first lil bit

Chapter one of humanitys edge:

“Hello this is liberty news, I am Sean Rogers tonight as I bring you a shocking report on terrorism. Today Freeport 7 was attacked, there were no survivors. In further study…..”

6 weeks later….

Jack was walking in his office building, one of the 123,456 buildings that went so high that the broke the cloud barrier. Jack had fear of heights and was quite annoyed when he was asked to work in a corner at the top. In a corner were the walls were made of glass. Jack was writing a letter to his friend in the liberty navy who was fighting the ‘terrorists’ that supposedly hade more advanced ships that seemed alive

His Friend was off in Rhienland, were the primary defenses had fallen. The liberty navy had sent 1/3 of there ships there. The remaining Rhienland people were still in a riot because of the drafting. A problem liberty was soon to have to face.

The count down to drafting was on the upcoming Saturday. And currently jack noted, it was Friday. Jack was the type of person that would be drafted, he had logged 700 hours of space ship flying and was a well built person.

The fate of Kusari was unknown, all ships sent there lost radio contact after going through the jump holes and jump gates. And they never returned… the Siruis nation council had vetoed the idea of freeing or saving kusari. Bretonia was doing fine, many of its troops were in Rhienland, and it was the last house that the nomads would attack due to its location. It had collapsed all Jump gates and jump holes that did not lead to liberty or border worlds that did not lead to liberty. Many people in liberty were fleeing, but also lots were being detained until the draft was in full fledge.

Jack sipped his coffee, it was almost time to go home. He had sold his ‘car’ and space ship for need of money. The Siruis economy was collapsing and food prices were at a all time high. It was rumored that planet Pittsburgh has 3 massive battleships in orbit dumping chemicals into the planet trying to terraform it faster to feed the hungry people of siruis.

But there were further crisis, all civilian ships were grounded, and sometimes scrapped or used for the reserves. Jack had seen tons of riots on the news, of course jack and most people did not trust the news.

Jack walked out of the building, he was going home and getting a very long nights sleep. Tomorrow his life would change.

oh and bout thee RPG thingy, i am sure jacob can and will do fine, he knows this thing better then me (2.0 that is)

Jack woke up to the sound of intense banging, being himself he turned over and went tried to go back to sleep. Then he heard weapons fire, he jumped out of bed and ran over to his window. The MP’s had come, and riots combated them in the streets. The MP’s started to shoot at them, darts that would knock them out of course.

Jack heard a knock upon his door.

“Who the hell is it” Jack yelled worried and annoyed at the same time

“MP’s, your being drafted. If you so much as come out with a weapon, your dead” The MP yelled in a army style.

“Fine!” Jack said “but get me in orbit those crowds on the streets…”

“You will be transferred to Base code 00987, then sent to west point, brief training and then to combat” The MP said in a dull army tone as if he was reading it off a paper.

Jack grabbed his coat and went outside. There were 3 MP’s standing there, with guns pointed at his forehead.

“Chill guys, I am unarmed” Jack said, clearly scared and sweating

“Okay men!” the lead MP said “Lets go!”

Jack followed the MP’s down the stairs. Elevators and most power was off line due to the riots. Jack and the MP’s were in the lobby of the Apartment building when a man in a suit walked up to them.

“We will take this from here” the man in the suit said coldly.

“Err…” a lead MP said worried, not knowing to trust them “ You men have papers?”

“Yes” The man in the suit said “File 002355 Jack Carter”

“That works” Said he MP eager to get out of there

“Dismissed” The man in the suit said “Mr. Carter we have a ship waiting to transfer you to a base in area 21.”:

“Area 21?” Jack said amazed “That’s a classified zone!”

Wow!
DS, i think you have FINALLY learned how to spell and use grammer!
I wish you learned earlier, because it is rather hellish to try to fix all the thousands of errors in your stories in the FFC. It isn't perfect, but it is quite an improvement.
Keep going, this is the best yet!



Edited by - ww2jacob on 11/24/2004 2:12:03 PM

thanks it WAS partly a keyboard that you have to make a fist and punch to get it to type a letter. but i tried and i got better

This is great so far! jood gob

yes also i take pay pal donations next chap will be up soon

Edit: i think ya'll willl like me next chapter, oh and me msn is [email protected] OR [email protected]

Edited by - DSQrn on 11/25/2004 7:30:00 PM

Chapter 3; Humanitys Edge:

Jack got in the car with the man in the suite, he touched his mouth. His metal tooth hurt,he had got it after a tought
group of thugs tried to take him.

"Major Hawkson code 475848949 Jack Conner suspect 47729 of infestation of unknown beings coded classified 045345
Suspect to be taken to alaska and terminated" Jack heard. He realized his metal tooth had picked up a radio signal.

"Uh.. Can we pull over here?" jack said, looking scared "Its very importent"
"Alright" The Man said

They stepped out of the car and into a empty ally. Jack hit the man, then struck him in the throat.
The man pulled out a gun and pointed it at jacks head, Jack grabbed his hand and twisted it in a wrist lock,
The gun dropped. Jack kept putting on pressure until he heard a loud snap. the he grabbed the gun off the floor
and pointed it at the man

"Why?" Jack yelled "Why did you think you could just kill me?"

Then man said nothing, his face twisted with pain

"Oh to hell with this" Jack yelled "To bloody hell with this"
Then he Shot the Man repeatedly. Then jack ran back to the car looking worried. Inside the car was
a phone. Jack grabbed it and dailed a number.

"Yeah" said someone on the other line

"Richard? This is jack!" Jack said, whispering

"Yo man!" Richard said "Why the hell to are you whispering"

"The police think for some reason i am infested with something, i dunno. then tried to
take me to alaska, area 21 and kill me! i got lucky and picked this up and killed the officer."

"Thats crazy man!" Richard said "Frickin crazy, but i can get you off planet!"

"Really?" Jack said exictedly "Bretonia?"

"No if what you say is true and liberty is after you then Bretonia isn't safe. i can get you to kusari but
we dont know whats out there!"

"We?" jack asked

"Jack you know i am a Socail reformer so to speak. i have friends in Interesting places. Anyhow i can get you to... say kepler
its pretty safe, ofcourse its rouges whoy ou will be killing the time with. They got traps for the nomads"

"Nomads? what are those?" jack asked "Those unknown ships?"

"Never mind it jack, just meet me at our spot" Richard said with a chuckle

"Alright i will be there ASAP"

End chapter

pretty darn good, I have to say.