In my opinion, it dosent matter about the grammer... as long as its not in 15 sentnce long blocks.... it all just seeps together in one ball of confusing consufing stuff.... Well, I havent finished reading the story but Killzones post is fresh in my mind.... heres something I think Im gonna add

News: ...and in other news the infamous Outcast piolt known only by his codename Killzone has escaped the attentions of Bounty Hunters everyway, his likley position has been drawn to Sigma 19...

Oh S*IT!! OH HOLY S*IT!!
Killzone turned around... only to find every Hunter in the bar looking at him...
What is it with me an Hunters today??
As one the Hunters charged at him...
Killzone smashed his foot into the plating by his stool and wranched it out of the floor
Killzone: This is getting rediculous....

As you can see, he quickly starts a bar brawl...enjoy, by the weekend I hope to add his bit..

Bein an Outcast is about doin things you wanna do: Kill, Terrorise, Murder, Destroy, Smoke Cardamine, ya know, normal stuff.....

I hope that's not on Malaga, cause there are no BH on Malaga

But I like it

Anyway, I fixed most (rather stupid) errors.

The word "alright" or "allright" is fine if it spoken. I've done that in several of my posts. It's conversational English. It can be a little off.

So Nick, is your character, Michael, have the hots for Malys now?

I'll try to post thursday or this weekend. I've got a heavy load and haven't been able to finish the post I've got saved in Word.

jedierrant

Saving damsels in distress,
Defending the defenseless,
Fighting for the underdog,
Don Quixote in an X-wing.

Play UT, and you'll leave crying Volun-Tears!

hehe. Typo. taken care of that one

I'm guessing you reffered to the last line

hey guys i am gonna be gone for a few days or less i got my internet yanked by my parents so i am posting at my next-dorm-over-mate's computer so i migh be gone for about 3 days but dont worry i will be back soon

BEWARE PETTY HUMAN, FOR YOU ARE CHEWY AND GOOD WITH KETCHUP!!!

leader of the dom kavosh dragons

Actually, strangely enough I do not have a spellchecker on this computer.

Anyway, I don't have perfect english either. It's just that, late at night, after going through 51 pages of stuff, soon every thing that's repeated, however how minor, just really gets on one's nerves.

Anyway, I just had to get that out of my system anyway. I'm mellow now, man. (Don't think that I'm angry or peeved or anything. Nor think that I'm a overzealous english teacher wannabe.)

(Hrm... I looked up zealous (then zeal) and I think I misused it in my previous posts. I meant to say that you guys use commas as periods way too often. Of course, I'm guilty of that, too )


At any rate, I can't upload the things yet because, for some reason, msn groups won't let me sign in.

Umm.. I was wondering something. I want to write a quick side excursion for Quigley and co. I'd like to include more of the people left at Malga. I'm going to take Connor (Eraser's char) and Sagara Seki (Ein's char) along, but would you like in, Whasp? You can come along if you want.

Or you can do your own thing back at Malga. Shouldn't May be starting the evacuation soon?

jedierrant

Saving damsels in distress,
Defending the defenseless,
Fighting for the underdog,
Don Quixote in an X-wing.

Play UT, and you'll leave crying Volun-Tears!




Edited by - jedierrant on 25-09-2003 05:27:51

I don't mind tagging along. Go ahead!

(Just remember, I'm still missing a fin, because I can't find a replacement. )

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Ah, but my bounce techhead, Jimmy might have a solution for you. It'd be ugly, but he could graft a Patriot fin on. You'd have the manueverability that the fin gives, but it'd be an eyesore.

Or your character could have a chance to swallow his pride and prejudice (any comments about the preceding phrase will get a trashing, ya cursed hecklers). The Dragons will no doubt have a couple. You may not like them, but I bet they would help because you are a part of the Vengeance group, group of legend.

Or if not I'm going to bring along Sagara Seki, (Ein's char. He was only in a couple of posts, but I'd like to keep him around as a NPC. Maybe his owner will return. Anyways, Sagara flys a Dragon. He might have a part. Those find most be small if they could be collapsed.

jedierrant

Saving damsels in distress,
Defending the defenseless,
Fighting for the underdog,
Don Quixote in an X-wing.

Play UT, and you'll leave crying Volun-Tears!

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From Locutus Don't mind me saying this but........

Congratulations Lutz!!!!

You have just created the longest thread ever in the Whole Forum

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Mint! Claim to fame!

Once again, sorry for not being around, especially when I said I would be. I'm trying my best, but life is so hectic with work, college, and a few personaly things that have to be sorted. I will try every moment I get to come back.

If it wasn't for the inky blackness of the night you wouldn't appreciate the brilliance of the stars...

You better hurry Lutz. I'm kinda waiting for you to write the rescue of Alys from Manhattan (I only think it's fair if you write that)

Jedi, wasn't Sagara Seki left behind in New Harlem ??? He never made it aboard the Vengeance .

Actually he might be on New Tokyo already.....

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Whasp, Why did you take out this line in the html-version?

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For all I know it's some kind of alien force using host bodies of highly placed officials, using them to trigger a war between the four houses so they can take over sirius!

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I thought it was pretty good

Ah but, Nick, you forget I have the mystical powers of authorship. Remember Seki's backstory? He said he was part of the Bundschuh after leaving Kusari space. I'm assuming after being left in the dust by our crew and the hostilities acting up, Seki went back to check on his comarades. That gives him a good chances to show up on Malga. I'd like to keep him around if Ein ever decides to come back and also I like NPCs.

jedierrant

Saving damsels in distress,
Defending the defenseless,
Fighting for the underdog,
Don Quixote in an X-wing.

Play UT, and you'll leave crying Volun-Tears!