jl-design - a new comic strip by me

Wed May 12, 2004 11:43 pm by The Ninja

hey again.

i've been busy again, and i need some opinion. (like i dont have enough of my own

)
Ive started writing a comic strip, about the three aspects of me,
Alex: the depressed pessimist in me,
Vincent: The hooligan in me,
Jake: the optimistic, silly person in me.

heres the first group shot.

any comments suggestions, you know what to do.

Viator

EDIT: I must give a shout-out to tshirt hell, for giving me the ideas for the humerous shirts in jld. www.tshirthell.com
the ones actually used were: IV:XX, and 'He loves the **** ->'

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Edited by - Viator on 5/16/2004 2:45:04 AM

Wed May 12, 2004 11:52 pm by freighter fighter

vi, your sig is dumb

Thu May 13, 2004 12:51 am by The Ninja

yup... great comment about the ACTUAL TOPIC. sigh.

but the first comic is up. check out it here

Vi

Edited by - Viator on 5/13/2004 1:56:38 AM

Edited by - Viator on 5/13/2004 1:58:05 AM

Thu May 13, 2004 2:24 am by mustang

Eh, the strip could be pretty funny but the whole computer game freak angle has been covered by Penny Arcade and Ctrl Alt Delete. Another thing is that your characters are completely expressionless, I personally think that computer drawn peeps are just far to hard to do. You would have been better off drawing them by hand, scanning them and then doing your inking and colouring. Free hand drawing allows you a lot more freedom with your characters looks and expressions and they're not so boxy either. I don't mean to sound harsh but if you want to produce a good product that people will like you have to go the whole ten yards.

Thu May 13, 2004 3:21 am by Griffon_26

No, mustang, no. It has its own unique style, I like it. Just because people don't do it the "easiest" or "better" way doesn't mean its not good. What if Picasso did things the "easier" or "better" way, hmm? HMM?

Keep it up

Thu May 13, 2004 3:28 am by The Ninja

the actual strip is about my life, which i have found after trying to invent characters, all i had to do is look around where i went to school. i could probably name the people that inspired the other characters im implimenting, but im not upto that.

@mustang: im aware that the strips look boxy, and that was the aim, not to be photo realistic.

@grif: thanks for the save.

I welcome almost any criticism well. (except maybe for the crack about my sig. meh... im over it)

Vi

Edited by - Viator on 5/13/2004 4:30:52 AM

Thu May 13, 2004 4:19 am by mustang

I didn't say it needed to be photo realistic, that wasn't the point I was driving at all. What I was getting at is that your characters will need to express emotions beyond the medium of text. Hence they will need to display plausible facial reactions that the audience can immediately relate to. It's just the way I saw it, that's all. Im sorry if I sounded over critical cause I think you do have a great starting point and providing you son't loose interest, it'll only get better.

Edited by - Mustang on 5/13/2004 5:22:05 AM

Thu May 13, 2004 4:59 am by gromit

I'm afraid I agree with mustang...your characters need to express emotion so facial expression is everything even if you do decide to stick with 2D type characters. The addition of a mouth would be a good start! Eyebrows are also everything, as are eyelids. Its amazing how much emotion you can show with a few facial expressions.

Otherwise, I actually found it quite amusing. Less talk, more expression. It works, trust me

HTH

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Thu May 13, 2004 5:03 am by Sir Spectre

Style works, more emotion. Yep, I agree. I like the boxiness, I like the design, I like the concept. You should somehow tell the story of how these 3 are the same person in a strip and not just through text.

Sir S

Thu May 13, 2004 11:16 am by Indy11

Assuming that you are going to use the boxiness as an element, tool or method of delivering humor, I guess the boxiness would work.... not sure. I could see how you would use that sort of stiff look to enhance a personality trait but for all three of them I don't know if it works.

I lean more toward Mustang's point but I haven't seen enough to know whether I like it or not.

And, unfortunately, I did not get it.

Thu May 13, 2004 3:33 pm by Griffon_26

Ehh but thats just the thing...why SHOULD they have expressions? What if he doesn't want them to? Is there a law saying they should? Eh? I guess its just opinion?

Perhaps have then expressionless until some point of crisis and then have their mouths go rediculously huge like anime

Thu May 13, 2004 3:45 pm by Sir Spectre

Griffon has a bit of a point, but I would only make one of the three expressionless. All of them being that way would make for an uninteresting strip, IMO.

Sir S

Thu May 13, 2004 3:56 pm by H.Q. Victor

Expressions tell as much if not more of the story. The balloon caption tells a little, but Blondie with an angry face speaks even more that Dag is in serious trouble.

Thu May 13, 2004 4:03 pm by Wolf_Demon

@viator, i really like it

its unique. i dont recall seeing different characters taht look almost exactly alike

EDIT: lol i looked thru ur other things....and, Erin looka kinda dumb...no offense

Edited by - ):Wolf_Demon

on 5/13/2004 7:54:09 PM

Thu May 13, 2004 9:33 pm by The Ninja

Thanks for all the input everyone.

Since this is the first strip, then its going to be a little shonky to start with.

Vi

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